Alight bright--the Pleiades Amidst the calm cosmic pool Aloft Himalaya's peaks Adorning his crown of snow Aqua-blue glittering gems Alive since before the king Always young; always shining
I’ve written this poem (after almost giving up) in the Pleiades form: Pick a ONE WORD TITLE then write a SEVEN-LINE poem of SEVEN SYLLABLES whereby each line begins with the FIRST LETTER of your title. For me it wasn’t easy, it sounded easy enough but after I wrote the first three lines I was stuck. I hope I’ve done the form (some) justice.
The Pleiades (/ˈpliːədiːz/, /ˈplaɪədiːz/), also known as the Seven Sisters and Messier 45, are an open star cluster containing middle-aged, hot B-type stars in the north-west of the constellation Taurus.
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M. Jay Dixit, 2020
Posted over at dverse: Poetics: Stars that count
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Nice job with this Jay! ❤️
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Big thanks, Cindy🙂❤
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I think you’ve done exceptionally well with this difficult form!
Sometimes when we have to work harder on something it turns out splendid 🙂
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I totally agree! Hard work always pays off 🙂Thank you, Kate!
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always a pleasure Jay 🙂
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Amidst the comb cosmic pool I really like that well written.
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Many thanks, Rob! 😁
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Good thing you didn’t give up, Jay! This is a great poem. ❤ The reference to the Himalayas and the wonderful photo really set this post apart! Have a great day! 🙂
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I’m happy you found it unique (^_^) ❤ thank you, Cheryl! Have a great one yourself😁
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Oh you did very well… the image of stars above the Himalayas sounds like something so worth seeing
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Thank you, sir🙂
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Your piece is perfect. I agree it’s not easy to write surrounded by rules. But you managed and I really love how Pleiades were the crown for the majestic Himalayas. And the gender assignment was a nice touch too.
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Big thanks for your precious comment! 🙂
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Wonderful Jay! I love the way you tied in the ancient mountains with the stars and kings. Great job!
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Thank you, Dwight! (^_^)
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Nice!! I see you and David (ben Alexander) have done a brilliant job at attempting this form of poetry!! 👏👏👌💐
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Thank you, Diana. He is an awesome poet! I agree. 🙂❤
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you’re very sweet Diana 🙂
and we would be remiss to mention Dwight’s poem too!
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Absolutely!!! ❤️
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I like it. It’s a good poem and it doesn’t show that you had any trouble with it at all!
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Many thanks, Jane😁
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🙂
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You have captured the beauty of the heavens and mountains. This was soothing to the soul.
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Thank you! (^_^)
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Forms are never easy especially when they look as though they should be! but you did so well with this prompt – thank you for joining in – I especially like the setting you have given these jewels
“Alight bright–the Pleiades
Amidst the calm cosmic pool”
Magical setting over the Himalia’s and the subtle reference to the King!
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Thank you, Laura! Btw since you mentioned the “King” here’s a fact you might be interested in–“Parvateshwara” in sanskrit is the personification of Himalayan Mountains. He was the ruler of the Himalaya Kingdom of Ancient India, which finds mention in the epic Mahabharata. Also, The Himalaya is known as the King of the Mountains 🙂
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The Mountains are 50 million years old but the Seven Sisters are 100 Million years old and that fact inspired me to write this poem😁
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thank you for filling me in on that reference – I was not sure
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I like the double crown of snow and stars. (K)
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Thank you very much, K. (^_^)
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This is beautiful and calming like a starlit sky. Glad you pushed through. I got stuck after five lines, before finally finding the last two.
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Yeah, it’s a tricky form, I agree. Thank you!🙂
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Well done for not giving up, Jay, it was worth it. I love the internal rhyme in the opening line and the thought of the stars ‘Always young; always shining’.
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Big thanks, Kim!🙂
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Hmn… maybe I’ll try my hand at this 🙂
Seems like a fun challenge – you did a great job!
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Sure, it’s a tricky one for sure. Thank you, David!
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Bravo, nice one Dixit
Much🖤love
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Many thanks, Gillena :))
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