Rain Falling Down — Square Poem

Rain falling down on railroad tracks,
Falling drops in platform above gutter.
Down in gutter--a rat bathing,
On platform, a man is eating.
Railroad above rat is now shaking,
Tracks gutter, bathing eating, shaking waiting.

It is ‘not’ a ‘Classic’ square poem because those poems should have the number of syllables per line equal to the number of lines. Rather, mine’s a Carrol Square poem.

While you can read the lines in the normal way i.e. horizontally, the poem can also be read in columns. Either way, the poem reads exactly the same!

Lewis Carrol was a genius mathematician and great poet, in this poetry form he has embedded his knowledge of Matrix. Carroll created a 6×6 square poem, but it can be done with any length.

I Often Wondered by Lewis Carrol

I often wondered when I cursed,
Often feared where I would be –
Wondered where she’d yield her love
When I yield, so will she.
I would her will be pitied!
Cursed be love! She pitied me…

It’s pretty easy to do this with random, nonsensical words. The amazing thing is that each line of the poem does make sense – with a bit of mental gymnastics – and the poem hangs together pretty well as a whole.

I found out about Square poems when I was going through an old (and by old, I mean VERY) dverse post by Samuel Peralta here is the link to it.

When I was ‘going’ to college (I mean before the Lockdown days) I used to commute daily. I never thought I’d miss that part of my life but I do. In the evening when I was coming back home, more often than not–the train was late and more often than not–I was alone. So I used to observe the people, the tracks and stuff until the train came. I loved playing the role of an artist (at the time I wasn’t into poetry that much but I was beginning to get into it). Rain Falling Down must’ve come from there.

M. Jay Dixit, 2021

19 thoughts on “Rain Falling Down — Square Poem

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  1. Jay i really have to commend you on always posting about something you’ve created that’s more than just emotion, imagery etc. I always learn of new poetic forms from your blog. I hope this new year continues to inspire you as much as you inspire others.

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  2. Thank you for the wonderful poem and lesson. I’ll have to try bending my brain around the challenge of creating one myself. It’s funny how we find ourselves writing poetry, seemingly from nowhere. You were sitting on a platform, I was sitting at the base of a tree.
    I’m looking forward to more.
    Tim

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      1. WHOO HOO! Maybe I’ll play those numbers tonight!
        The first poem I wrote wasn’t the first one I posted. I called it ‘To Old Friends’, posted in Sept, 2019. The environments we live in are different, but equally inspiring.

        Tim

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